This is what happened at dinner tonight.

[AutographedMemorabilia]

I thought perhaps you had magically discovered grammar and punctuation but it just turns out that some kid had a fake gun...at least that's what i could gather from reading that headache inducing paragraph.

The Valley is a s***hole...wouldn't be surprised if it was a real gun.

You know Kyle4156.
I am not going to get into a fight with a keyboard warrior.

 

[wolvesjr34]

One thing I have noticed in this thread, instead of being constructive and helping a guy out with his writing style, a few of you have been a bit insulting. How about some constructive criticism?

For what its worth I could follow the story.

 

[sgt_pepper]

One thing I have noticed in this thread, instead of being constructive and helping a guy out with his writing style, a few of you have been a bit insulting. How about some constructive criticism?

For what its worth I could follow the story.

i could follow the story aswell, but not in a natural, free-flowing style.
i imagine he uses a phone to post, which he types in a hurry, with auto-correct on.
usually i dont mention bad spelling/grammar/punctuation, because you can tell what theyre trying to say. with this dude, it becomes quite difficult at times tho.
constructive criticism? start spelling correctly. start using punctuation. stop writing words/parts of sentences double. check what youre posting is coherent before you post it.
its not hard...
as for the story? dont really see what the big deal is, but thats just me...

 

[taffster74]

I could follow it easily, but then again I'm a writer and have a degree in professional writing from the University of Canberra - trust me, if i can follow Concrete Poetry, then i can follow anything. Even though I've never had a weapon pulled on me, I have lived in some of the rougher areas of Sydney (canberra, Auburn), so I understand his reaction. Don't have to worry about it down here in Canberra though. Somehow, the sight of a 6'1 guy at 90kg with long hair wearing predominantly black clothes is intimidating for some reason. did I mention I'm a big-time metal head and sometimes wear a megadeth t-shirt?

 

[package]

#Coolstorybro

I just couldn't follow it. Can someone have a go at a re-write because it does sound interesting.

 

[tak35bne]

I could follow it easily, but then again I'm a writer and have a degree in professional writing from the University of Canberra - trust me, if i can follow Concrete Poetry, then i can follow anything. Even though I've never had a weapon pulled on me, I have lived in some of the rougher areas of Sydney (canberra, Auburn), so I understand his reaction. Don't have to worry about it down here in Canberra though. Somehow, the sight of a 6'1 guy at 90kg with long hair wearing predominantly black clothes is intimidating for some reason. did I mention I'm a big-time metal head and sometimes wear a megadeth t-shirt?

Who is Megadeth?

 

[Jaede]

Who is Megadeth?

They are a thrash metal band

 

[taffster74]

Jaede got it in one.

 

[Jaames]

Never bring a chair to a gun fight.